Very relaxing, chill, chillaxing, immersive, submersive, and other such adjectives made-up or otherwise. Good job!
Great choice of words, melody, and rhythm. I really liked it, although I feel like the vocal layering/chorus effect part went on for too long.
This is very funny and that guy's friend sounds like a very bad writer. This is very good and irregardless of whether you continue this specific story I'd like to hear more prose. Also, the imagery was very good. For all intensive purposes this was very good as such, but it obviously feels unfinished. In conclusion, this is very good, and I could care less about background music or sound affects. Supposably you have more written and I'd like to hear it.
Many thanks Zump! I'm still working on this so expect more sometime soon.
Very well produced and thought provoking. Voice acting was good as well, not perfect, a few more drinks would have helped, but mostly good.
Heh heh, thanks!
Great! The ending seemed like somewhat of a non sequitur in rhyme and reason, but I liked the imagery.
I have also contacted GY!BE, and they will be arriving soon with the internet police to sue you of all your wealth and possessions. Partly for using their music without permission, but mostly for forgetting the exclamation point.
Ha ha, fixed. Cheers for the review!
I liked the mood of the song, and how the melodies and song structure were very unforeseeable. The choice of instruments was good as well, but it could use some more natural instruments, perhaps a dash of shaker and a smidgen of didgeridoo.
Although it is more predictable, something probably should have been done with the tension built up after 2:48, instead of just starting the outro.
Yes, the ending is quite bad. It's more a result of running out of ideas than of concluding a piece. Good point about the instruments too, i never spend much time on my synths so that should change.
It has what I like to hear in a loop, enough stuff going on that it deserves multiple listens.
Thanks for the positive feedback!
It could use more ambiance and audial cues, except for that last bit which destroyed my ears.
Hm, my first time trying a sound-scape sort of thing so thanks for the advice. Glad the story was interesting!
I very much liked the message conveyed, the structure in which it was done so, and the voice work, but as for the diction, I felt there could have been better wording in line 4 of stanza 5,
as well as lines 4 and 5 of stanza 4. Great wordplay otherwise.
Also, I don't think "ambivently" is a word.
I'm not much of a poet, so here is something someone else scribbled:
"Death most resembles a prophet who is without honor in his own land or a poet who is a stranger among his people."
Ah yes, i meant "ambivalently" which is the adverb form of ambivalent. And you're right about those lines, "stuff" wasn't a good word to use but i was struggling to convey the vision without losing it's subtlety and didn't want to explicitly state any objects. Thanks for the helpful review, kind words, and interesting quote.
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